Our Entry for Myths of the Mirror.com Fiction Prompt ~Strange Dimensions… #Poetry

March Speculative Fiction Prompt

 

 

Strange Dimensions

Why am I here?

This strange world that tastes metallic

where the sun is hidden behind a dark orb

leaving this world in blue shadow.

The air howled between the buildings

searching. I try walking away

a stronger feeling holds me in place.

I need to stay, follow the wind

find what it is searching for.

As I turn to enter this blue dimension

the metallic taste becomes stronger.

There is blood in the air.

Inside the new citadel

the air feels like a heavy coat.

Hands claw at me, trying to remove it

it is stuck fast.

My movements slow to a crawl

no sign of life, no sound

but the wind screaming louder

until I thought my ears would bleed

adding to the metallic taste.

Have I stepped into a world of the dead?

where nothing remains

but the taste of their blood…

AAAAA


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26 responses to “Our Entry for Myths of the Mirror.com Fiction Prompt ~Strange Dimensions… #Poetry”

  1. Great descriptive storytelling Anita <3

    1. Thank you, Debby…

      1. Pleasure :)

  2. I actually love how you can’t tell if the narrator is exactly human – I think so, but then ‘taste of blood’ makes me feel like it’s more a Grim Reaper type of character. So spooky! Love it.

    1. I am loving your take on the character!

      1. Yay! I was worried when I’d commented that you’d feel I’d missed something obvious…

        1. Your comment was very insightful…

  3. I really like this – it bring Diana’s prompt alive for me … Eric.

    1. Thank you, Eric…

  4. Strong sensations in this poem and a nice response to Diana’s prompt!

    1. Glad you liked it, Priscilla…

  5. Great poem… Dark but deep… And real wonderful job.

    1. Thank you, Judy…

  6. Reblogged this on Myths of the Mirror and commented:
    A dark poem from Anita. I hope you enjoy the taste of blood!

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    I love your use of the different senses to describe this experience of dystopia.

    1. Thank you, Antonia…

  8. I just had a terrible thought. We didn’t use this for your prompt, did we? Swiftly followed by wondering if we actually contributed this month. Off to check, so will apologise in advance!

    1. No, you hadn’t submitted yet. So this is perfect. And no apologies needed at all. <3 <3 Happy Weekend!

      1. Thanks for being kind about it, Diana. I’m an idiot!

        1. My please and No you’re not! You’re incredibly kind to participate and share.

          1. A wake- up call, at least!

  9. I really like this poem, Anita. I could picture it going with another prompt too. :-)

    1. I have checked with Anita and I’m now in the doghouse! This poem was meant for you, but I have no idea or excuse as to why you didn’t get it. I have system set up to make sure this doesn’t happen, but somehow it did.
      I will amend the postforthwith, and cannot apologise enough.

      1. No apologies needed at all, Jaye Marie. Tell Anita to let you out of the doghouse! Ha ha. I’m so glad I stumbled across the poem (coincidence or synchronicity?) Isn’t that odd how that happens? Anyway, no problem. I will add to the reblog list. My pleasure. <3

  10. Powerful, Anita <3

    1. Thank you, Jacquie…

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