Our Entry for Myths of the Mirror.com Fiction Prompt ~Strange Dimensions… #Poetry

March Speculative Fiction Prompt

 

 

Strange Dimensions

Why am I here?

This strange world that tastes metallic

where the sun is hidden behind a dark orb

leaving this world in blue shadow.

The air howled between the buildings

searching. I try walking away

a stronger feeling holds me in place.

I need to stay, follow the wind

find what it is searching for.

As I turn to enter this blue dimension

the metallic taste becomes stronger.

There is blood in the air.

Inside the new citadel

the air feels like a heavy coat.

Hands claw at me, trying to remove it

it is stuck fast.

My movements slow to a crawl

no sign of life, no sound

but the wind screaming louder

until I thought my ears would bleed

adding to the metallic taste.

Have I stepped into a world of the dead?

where nothing remains

but the taste of their blood…

AAAAA


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  1. dgkaye Avatar

    Great descriptive storytelling Anita <3

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Thank you, Debby…

      1. dgkaye Avatar

        Pleasure :)

  2. H.R.R. Gorman Avatar

    I actually love how you can’t tell if the narrator is exactly human – I think so, but then ‘taste of blood’ makes me feel like it’s more a Grim Reaper type of character. So spooky! Love it.

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      I am loving your take on the character!

      1. H.R.R. Gorman Avatar

        Yay! I was worried when I’d commented that you’d feel I’d missed something obvious…

        1. jenanita01 Avatar

          Your comment was very insightful…

  3. EDC Writing/Believing Sight Unseen Avatar

    I really like this – it bring Diana’s prompt alive for me … Eric.

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Thank you, Eric…

  4. Priscilla Bettis Avatar

    Strong sensations in this poem and a nice response to Diana’s prompt!

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Glad you liked it, Priscilla…

  5. Judy st hillaire Avatar

    Great poem… Dark but deep… And real wonderful job.

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Thank you, Judy…

  6. D. Wallace Peach Avatar

    Reblogged this on Myths of the Mirror and commented:
    A dark poem from Anita. I hope you enjoy the taste of blood!

  7. antoniazen Avatar

    I love your use of the different senses to describe this experience of dystopia.

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Thank you, Antonia…

  8. jenanita01 Avatar

    I just had a terrible thought. We didn’t use this for your prompt, did we? Swiftly followed by wondering if we actually contributed this month. Off to check, so will apologise in advance!

    1. D. Wallace Peach Avatar

      No, you hadn’t submitted yet. So this is perfect. And no apologies needed at all. <3 <3 Happy Weekend!

      1. jenanita01 Avatar

        Thanks for being kind about it, Diana. I’m an idiot!

        1. D. Wallace Peach Avatar

          My please and No you’re not! You’re incredibly kind to participate and share.

          1. jenanita01 Avatar

            A wake- up call, at least!

  9. D. Wallace Peach Avatar

    I really like this poem, Anita. I could picture it going with another prompt too. :-)

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      I have checked with Anita and I’m now in the doghouse! This poem was meant for you, but I have no idea or excuse as to why you didn’t get it. I have system set up to make sure this doesn’t happen, but somehow it did.
      I will amend the postforthwith, and cannot apologise enough.

      1. D. Wallace Peach Avatar

        No apologies needed at all, Jaye Marie. Tell Anita to let you out of the doghouse! Ha ha. I’m so glad I stumbled across the poem (coincidence or synchronicity?) Isn’t that odd how that happens? Anyway, no problem. I will add to the reblog list. My pleasure. <3

  10. Jacquie Biggar Avatar

    Powerful, Anita <3

    1. jenanita01 Avatar

      Thank you, Jacquie…

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