Somehow, we have come up with two haiku this week, and I quite like the first one best…



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17 responses to “Colleen’s Weekly #Poetry Challenge”

  1. Ahh, these are so evocative and quite stunning haiku. A pleasure to read them.

    1. Thank you so much, Jude…

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    Both are beautiful, Anita. I especially love the phrase, “shadow following.” 💗

    1. Thank you, Gwen…

  3. Great work, Anita. The second one really grabs me! Remember, haiku are not philosophical, nor do they deal with generalizations. I would say the first one is a senryu because of the last line, which is kind of witty. The second is haiku, and it’s excellent. I like how this haiku puts me right next to you… I think I can see that shadow. <3

    1. Need more practice, Colleen but loved your comments… 💕

      1. We all need more practice. I figure we’ll all learn this stuff together. And, there’s nothing wrong with writing senryu. <3

  4. Oh goodness, I would hate to have to choose the best one. I tend to like the second one maybe a teensy bit more than the first. It would be splitting hairs.

    1. Good to know, Jan… 💕

  5. Lovely idea, Anita – that you could turn and capture your shadow in a different way; but only under the Moon’s light!

    1. Anita always seems to find the magic… wish I did!

      1. I think you both have a strong sense of mystery and magic 😊

        1. I love that you just said that, Steve…

  6. They are both quite nice. I do like the sense of play between the stars and the water in the first.

    1. Thank you…

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