Jaye Marie and Anita Dawes

Colleen’s Weekly #Poetry Challenge

Somehow, we have come up with two haiku this week, and I quite like the first one best…

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  1. judeitakali Avatar
    judeitakali

    Ahh, these are so evocative and quite stunning haiku. A pleasure to read them.

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Thank you so much, Jude…

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  3. Gwen M. Plano Avatar
    Gwen M. Plano

    Both are beautiful, Anita. I especially love the phrase, “shadow following.” 💗

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Thank you, Gwen…

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  4. Colleen M. Chesebro Avatar
    Colleen M. Chesebro

    Great work, Anita. The second one really grabs me! Remember, haiku are not philosophical, nor do they deal with generalizations. I would say the first one is a senryu because of the last line, which is kind of witty. The second is haiku, and it’s excellent. I like how this haiku puts me right next to you… I think I can see that shadow. <3

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Need more practice, Colleen but loved your comments… 💕

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      1. Colleen M. Chesebro Avatar
        Colleen M. Chesebro

        We all need more practice. I figure we’ll all learn this stuff together. And, there’s nothing wrong with writing senryu. <3

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        1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
          Books & Bonsai

          XX

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  5. Jan Sikes Avatar
    Jan Sikes

    Oh goodness, I would hate to have to choose the best one. I tend to like the second one maybe a teensy bit more than the first. It would be splitting hairs.

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Good to know, Jan… 💕

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  6. Steve Tanham Avatar
    Steve Tanham

    Lovely idea, Anita – that you could turn and capture your shadow in a different way; but only under the Moon’s light!

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Anita always seems to find the magic… wish I did!

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      1. Steve Tanham Avatar
        Steve Tanham

        I think you both have a strong sense of mystery and magic 😊

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        1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
          Books & Bonsai

          I love that you just said that, Steve…

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  7. D. Avery @shiftnshake Avatar
    D. Avery @shiftnshake

    They are both quite nice. I do like the sense of play between the stars and the water in the first.

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    1. Books & Bonsai Avatar
      Books & Bonsai

      Thank you…

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