Jaye Marie and Anita Dawes

#Flash Fiction Challenge for Carrot Ranch Literary Community

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Jaye Marie & Anita Dawes
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(99 words, no more, no less)

I am your ghost, your past. I walk before you on thorny pathways so you shall not walk the path of sorrow.  You shall not see the things I have.

You are ten years old now, so blow out your candles and let loose those balloons with all their wishes attached.

I have received them now; your wishes made from your past come true, they have come to pass. Soon I shall re-join you when adult paths you reach, until then, I collect every balloon and every wish you make.

I wait in shadows until we are one again …

© 2018 Anita Dawes

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10 responses to “#Flash Fiction Challenge for Carrot Ranch Literary Community”

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  2. Charli Mills Avatar
    Charli Mills

    Well done, Anita. The coming full circle with one’s past as the one to pave the future is intriguing.

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    1. jenanita01 Avatar
      jenanita01

      Thanks for liking my efforts, Charli. I’m new to flash fiction and really enjoying it. I used to write a lot of poetry years ago, and your post has brought it all back to me!

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        Charli Mills

        Such a tight constraint as flash fiction uses similar elements of poetry. It’s as much about what you don’t say as what you do. Glad you are enjoying it!

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          jenanita01

          :D

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  3. cathleentownsend Avatar
    cathleentownsend

    This is beautiful, Anita. You’ve worked the drabble in its most profound form in my opinion–you’ve made something like a prose poem. Simply lovely. :)

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      jenanita01

      We really appreciate your approval, Cathleen… XX

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  4. janmalique Avatar
    janmalique

    So poignant…

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    1. jenanita01 Avatar
      jenanita01

      Thanks, Jan… X

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        janmalique

        My pleasure. It’s a heartfelt post. x

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