Jaye Marie and Anita Dawes

Which Is The Better Opening Line – And WHY?

Dan Alatorre AUTHOR's avatarDAN ALATORRE

  1. Every drum was silent as the noose slipped over his head and tightened around his neck.

  2. Every drum was silent as the noose slipped over his head.

  3. Every drum was silent as the noose tightened around his neck.

Which is the better opening line – first? Second? Third? NONE?

And why is it better?

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  1. Writing Links 10/30/17 – Where Genres Collide Avatar
    Writing Links 10/30/17 – Where Genres Collide

    […] https://jenanita01.com/2017/10/27/which-is-the-better-opening-line-and-why/ I like: The drums silenced while the noose tightened around his neck. Less passive that way. […]

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  2. Saddles to Shorelines, and Life as it Comes Avatar
    Saddles to Shorelines, and Life as it Comes

    As a reader, I like number 1, because it’s more descriptive.

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