Which Is The Better Opening Line – And WHY?

Dan Alatorre

  1. Every drum was silent as the noose slipped over his head and tightened around his neck.

  2. Every drum was silent as the noose slipped over his head.

  3. Every drum was silent as the noose tightened around his neck.

Which is the better opening line – first? Second? Third? NONE?

And why is it better?

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