Using my unreleased manuscript An Angel On Her Shoulder, I am showing you my techniques for reworking a story into a more readable, more enjoyable piece. It’s 45+ lessons in about 45 days. (To start at Chapter 1, click HERE.)

To view it best, bring up the two versions in different windows and view them side by side to see what was changed.

Then give me your thoughts in the comment section.

DRAMA

You’ve probably gotten tired of hearing the phrase “this is tricky” from me, but it’s true. As J. K. Rowling said, you’re going to kill a lot of trees before you get it right. I’ll give you my thoughts below, so as not to spoil too much of what you’re about to read.

Chapter 18 “FINAL”

“Oh my God.” Mallory sunk to the floor, holding the counter top with one hand to…