Somehow, we have come up with two haiku this week, and I quite like the first one best…
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Anita Dawes and Jaye Marie
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Somehow, we have come up with two haiku this week, and I quite like the first one best…
Anita Dawes and Jaye Marie 
Ahh, these are so evocative and quite stunning haiku. A pleasure to read them.
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Thank you so much, Jude…
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Both are beautiful, Anita. I especially love the phrase, “shadow following.” 💗
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Thank you, Gwen…
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Great work, Anita. The second one really grabs me! Remember, haiku are not philosophical, nor do they deal with generalizations. I would say the first one is a senryu because of the last line, which is kind of witty. The second is haiku, and it’s excellent. I like how this haiku puts me right next to you… I think I can see that shadow. ❤
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Need more practice, Colleen but loved your comments… 💕
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We all need more practice. I figure we’ll all learn this stuff together. And, there’s nothing wrong with writing senryu. ❤
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Oh goodness, I would hate to have to choose the best one. I tend to like the second one maybe a teensy bit more than the first. It would be splitting hairs.
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Good to know, Jan… 💕
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Lovely idea, Anita – that you could turn and capture your shadow in a different way; but only under the Moon’s light!
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Anita always seems to find the magic… wish I did!
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I think you both have a strong sense of mystery and magic 😊
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I love that you just said that, Steve…
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They are both quite nice. I do like the sense of play between the stars and the water in the first.
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Thank you…
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